Your thougths on this poem, please?

A variety of potentials here, from repeating the same stupid mistakes to even wanting to do it but knowing better but can't break the cycle. This really needs a title to set it up more. Overall, I like.

Yes, that's quite lovely! I like the way you have displayed the words and strung them together in a way that creates not only an image, but a series of emotions. The feel to the poem changes the way you react in your mind as the verse passes down to the second verse. Well done you!

Sure, well that was a great poem and I think, judging from the answers you got, that in writing, it's fairly hazardous to cross the line from the concrete into abstraction. And of course! That's the beauty of it. It doesn't allow the higher functions of thought--logic and reason, to encroach or obfuscate where the delicate foot paths lead upward, out of the darkness of the cave and into redemption.

I actually like the repetition at the beginning of your lines. Look to add a bit more substance to the subject as right now it is confusing.

The poem is good, would not use the word Edited...but Locked my Remembrance

Rearranging in my Sleep

It does not appear to be clear on any subliminal level as to what your poem is about.

too mainstream...and I'm not aware of a true meaning, obvious or hidden.

wow that's amazing :)

it's pretty cool.