Feedback? i am starting to write a book. if you guys like the flash, this is a remake story ive made. so far it has 5 parts link in details?

Make the prologue more descriptive like an actual story and don't just tell the readers what's happening, or you can do a flash back instead if that helps?

In chapter 1, same with the prologue. This time I don't know where the character is at or how they look. All I know is the protagonist is fat and he likes a pretty girl. What's the situation? How did they meet there? Why are they meeting? Was there something certain a specific character was doing? I enjoy the inside dialog. BTW is your character straight forward or hesitant in anyway when he says how she is so great? I cant tell if he's being hesitant or saying it straight out like he has no care in the world. I'm just filling in all the blanks with my imagination that you're leaving. You need to fill it up like watering a plant. Water it too little, its doesn't grow (the story is rushed not enough detail). Water it too much, its loses balance (too much detail or dialog) if your not good with dialog be sure you don't bore your readers with details.

In chapter 2, its better. I know what's going on, where they are, what they think and it doesn't seem rushed to me. But me as a righter this seems like an important part of the story where it all began, I would put detail. you probably heard this before, details this, details that, but who ever said that was right.

In chapter 3, I like it the whole scene, I don't exactly understand the surroundings but with each chapter you seem to get better or I just like your plot and where your going with it. Either way it still needs detail, like always. probably let the doctor more thoroughly explain it and take some test on you.

In chapter 4, Detail! You need it. Describe how the world changed. How he changed. How your neighborhood changed. How everything changed. How he felt when he saw Kat. Every emotion he can have in this chapter should be conveyed. Did he miss it, like it, hate it, angry at it? What? Convey it.

All in all its great. The plot I mean. I know you read this 1 million times but making that 1 million and 1 more, Detail! You need it. don't say you don't cause you do, and I sure as hell know it. I don't want to point out all the mistakes but I just gave you the major ones.