What images surface when reading this?

Did she die from An aneurysm. It seem like there was a deep moment of passion and in an instant deep pain and sadness. It may seem shallow, but i see outdoor sex....then death and loneliness. I think that the heavens is a personification of deep shock....in the sense that you were held down .......am i close?

Pretty words without a lot of meaning. You have employed a lot of emotive wording to paint a confusing picture. "the heavens took advantage...permitting it's hands..." that makes absolutely no sense at all. If you could put some substance into the use of your pretty words, you'd really have something.

The spirits of the superb, resillient human beings of latest Orleans will teach mom Nature that they are able to't be wiped out. and in line with possibility all the international will comprehend we won't throw such quite some pollutants at mom Nature without her throwing something gruesome returned. we are all to blame. that is too undesirable the human beings of latest Orleans had to go through, yet human beings globally have and could suffered, too, if we don't discover ways to regulate what we deliver returned to mom Nature.

Wow, thats deep. I think a bit more description of your surroundings might help aid visualisation a bit more but perhaps I would need to read the rest of the work for this to be clear. Nevertheless, it sounds great, I want to read more.

Read first sentence. Saw a manga teen with rainbow pinwheel eyes and lots of tsu hee ma noises. Guffawed and then bailed.

Well I looked at your YA picture before so started thinking of dark surreal art and tattoos. Mainly purple, black, and red ink clouding water.

B grade amateur fiction.

Throw it away and start again unless you plan on writing for Mills and Boon.

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Having a fantasy about a woman, but thats just me

based on the last sentence it seems like the girl is dying?

None.Use of words that do not have a coherent meaning.